Diagramming Babel (Part 18)


Diagram 18. Will’s first date with Alcyone! Sort of. It doesn’t end well, of course. But look how clean the diagram is! This section is coming together fast. From bottom to top:

Emphatically Spring

Fata I.

Dwarf

look @ the party in R & J
(poulette)

A

F

(Ring)

“You don’t want to
Ring

Ring

He’s like Antaeus; in the air,
off of Babel, he shows fear
& nervous reaction

She screws him so there will be no unpaid debts

She tells him she’s notfor him

Alcyone ( ) is to be
extraordinary, to be her
own person, to be
a swashbuckler

ALCYONE: Act like somebody real!

Will was trying to listen.

Annotations:

W is again Will, A is Alcyone, and I think I’ll hold off on revealing who F is.

It’s spring, and Will is crashing a masked ball. After two quick encounters with “Fata I.” (the name was later tweaked) and her dwarf, Will has a more prolonged and involved encounter with a poulette. As he much earlier mused, “Witches were the self-appointed legislators of the world. They were forever sticking their long noses into other people’s business, demanding that a rosebush be replanted, or a child renamed, or a petty criminal taken down from the gallows half-choked but still breathing. It was next to impossible to be born, to lose one’s virginity, to plot a murder, to die, or to be reborn, without one or more popping up and uttering gnostic solemnities.” I almost threw “fall in love” in there, since the passage was meant to be, if not foreshadowing, at least prescient. But Will had already fallen in love with Alcyone in the Hanging Gardens, and there was no room for a witch in that scene.

I’d guess that R&J refers to Romeo and Juliet. As it happened, I went to War and Peace for inspiration instead.

It’s a little hard on Alcyone to write that she “screws” Will, or to imply that in so doing she’s simply balancing the books — though that’s what she thinks she’s doing, and how it feels to Will. But these diagrams are cartoons, and the most subtle interpersonal relationships are rendered as “He liked her” or “She put a fork through his hand.”

“Act like somebody real!” is good advice. Will is still growing, still learning, remember. He’s not yet worthy of a woman like Alcyone. Though he’s getting close.

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